Nordson Press Release (Mock-up)

In this mock-up, I have inserted a new subtitle, given the copy a heavy edit, and used bullets to break up the density of the presentation. The original press release is available here.

My edit maintains the length of the original copy, but cuts the average words-per-sentence figure by 50%. It also improves the readability score (from grade 16 to 12, hemingwayapp.com).

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